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Thank you to the soldier
that's gone away to war.
Thank you to the soldier
knowing what to fight for.

Thank you to the soldier
that serves beneath our flag.
Thank you to the soldier--
You possess courage I'll never have.

Thank you to the soldier;
a life forever changed.
Thank you to the soldier
who didn't come home the same.

Thank you to the soldier
that never saw the battlefield.
Thank you to the soldier;
a sacrifice forever real.

Thank you to the solider
that never made it home.
Thank you to the soldier...
who knows there's more to come.
:iconisabellaswancullen:
Thank you, Dad. Thank you, Mom. Thank you, Pop-pop. Thank you, Travis. Thank you, Jamie. Thank you, Brian. :heart:

The Veterans and current enlisted are the reasons we have the freedoms that we do. They deserve that recognition. They defend our rights and our safety every single day.

Written Nov 12, 2010.
Edited Nov 11, 2012.
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*cee69 Nov 17, 2012  Student Writer
I've already read through the comments, since I don't want to repeat what's already said. So, I see people either love it, or hate it.
Now, I'm not going either way, because it's a poem. They express feelings and feelings are never right or wrong. They just are.

The titel is clear, perhaps even to clear. Everybody who doesn't like war-related themes won't read it, but this might have been intentional.

The theme of the poem is pretty clear too, you are thanking the soldiers who fight for 'your' country. I like it that you keep it universal, not favoring any one country.

There is also a certain mantra in the sentences. However, not all sentences fall within the mantra like this one:
You possess courage I'll never have.
It has another rhythm then the other lines. If you read it out loud I'm sure you can hear it too.

Personally, I'm also missing a climax. You could shorten this to only 4 lines or extend it to 40, and still have the same effect.

I hope this helps you in the future :)
~cee
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!xxAce-Pilotxx Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So true, very good poem
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~isabellaswancullen Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you
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:iconbunnyfroofroo:
Absolutely perfect for today. :tighthug:
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~isabellaswancullen Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconbunnyfroofroo:
You're very welcome! :tighthug:
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:iconericdaneislovex3:
Love this will be favoriting <3
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~isabellaswancullen Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much
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`The-Lantiis Nov 11, 2012   Photographer
Beautiful!
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